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My thought about the topic in you can speak level 5

작성자: Tonybin 담당 튜터: Neiz
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
1. Will North Korea Give Up Its Nuclear Bombs?
My answer is No because they think nuclear bomb is their everything. They knew If they give up it, they would get more than sanctions.
They will keep trying to get concessions and sanctions relief using the nuclear bomb.
2. Why did previous attempts at peace and denuclearization fail?
Political issue in Korea peninsula is usually complicated with other countries. Just we cannot solve this problem by ourselfs. Strong nations like U.S.A, Japan, China, Russia always step on our shoes.They don’t want to unify south and north Korea.
튜터 교정 답변

1. Will North Korea Give Up Its Nuclear Bombs?
My answer is no because they think nuclear bomb is their everything. They knew if they give it up it, they would get more than sanctions. They will keep trying to get concessions and sanctions relief using the nuclear bomb.
2. Why did previous attempts at peace and denuclearization fail?
Political issue in Korea peninsula is usually complicated with other countries. We just cannot solve this problem by ourselfs ourselves. Strong nations like U.S.A, Japan, China, Russia always step on our shoes.They don’t want to unify South and North Korea.

 

 

REVISED:

1. Will North Korea Give Up Its Nuclear Bombs?
My answer is no because they think nuclear bomb is their everything. They knew if they give it up, they would get more than sanctions. They will keep trying to get concessions and sanctions relief using the nuclear bomb.
2. Why did previous attempts at peace and denuclearization fail?
Political issue in Korea peninsula is usually complicated with other countries. We just cannot solve this problem by ourselves. Strong nations like U.S.A, Japan, China, Russia always step on our shoes. They don’t want to unify South and North Korea.

 

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