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공개 첨삭 완료 2024. 03. 02 조회 4296

I spent a day with my friend.

작성자: whoisthe1222 담당 튜터: Lynda
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Like I said, I spent a holiday with my friend. Actually, we met two weeks ago yet, she moved to another house and she called me that she felt lonely. So we met and had a dinner together. Both she and I felt depressing these days, and we talked honestly about each situation. Like, When I felt thankful to you or how much I rely on you. We dropped some tears, but we also laughed a lot. I think we're a teacher to each other. We first met seven years ago, at that time we felt we won't match. But now, she's my valuable friend for me. She is fairly mature, so I more rely on her than other my friends.
튜터 교정 답변

Hello!~ 

Thank you for sharing!~ ^^ Yeah~ it feels so awesome to have a friend whom you can share anything you want to.~ ^^ Enjoy and cherish each moment together. Spend as much as you can as this can help your life be more meaningful and fun.~ ^^ 

**Correction: 

*Both she and I felt depressing these days, 

--> Both she and I felt depressed these days, 

*We dropped some tears, but we also laughed a lot.

--> We shed some tears but we also laughed a lot.

*She is fairly mature, so I more rely on her than other my friends.

--> She is more matured so I rely more on her than my other friends. 

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