Lesson15,Minimum wages

I would like to EXPRESS my opinion ABOUT minimum wages, after HAVING READ THE text book.
THE cost living in a city is easily affected by many factors, such as oil priceS, some strike, AND minimum wages.
In Korea, we ALSO have A minimum wage, which is controlled and instituted by THE government.
Based on 2024's law, the minimum wage in Korea THE MINIMIUM WAGE IS $7.50, which is almost half of THE RATE IN THE US.  I support raising wages but we have to be cautious, Because OTHE PARTS OF THE KOREAN ECONOMY WOULD BE AFFECTED by THE MINIMUM WAGE being raised.  For instance, if part THE time job RATE GOES up, the increased RATE must lead higher costS in RESTAURANT menuS.

YONGBEOM, YOUR WRITING WAS VERY GOOD AND EXPRESSED YOUR IDEAS WELL.  I HAVE MADE SOME CHANGES.  IT IS EASY FOR YOU TO SEE THE WORDS I REPLACED OR REORGANIZED TO CORRECT THE SENTENCE STRUCTURE; THEY ARE IN CAPITAL LETTERS.  HOWEVER, IN ORDER TO SEE WHAT WORDS I REMOVED, AND WHAT PUNCTUATION I ADDED, YOU WILL HAVE TO COMPARE OUR TWO WORKS WORD-FOR-WORD.  NICE JOB!