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공개 첨삭 완료 2024. 03. 23 조회 4474

Making sentences~

작성자: whoisthe1222 담당 튜터: Lynda
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
What's your the most memorable moment?
I prepared five clothes sets, but she selected only one set.
All kids run around everywhere.
I need to find any pavilion to sit my family.
The president hosted this workshop, but he didn't participate.
She made me an unforgettable memory at the amusement park.
Don't worry a lot. I will work out.
My team member haven't ever been participating in team-building activity.
I want to do something to develope my community.
He considers to bond between parents and children.
That's a good cause to paly games.
튜터 교정 답변

What's your the most memorable moment?

Better say: What's your most memorable moment? (*remove "the" ) 


I prepared five clothes sets, but she selected only one set.

Better say: I prepared five sets of clothes, but she selected only one. 


All kids run around everywhere. --**Correct sentence~ ^^ 


I need to find any pavilion to sit my family.

Better say: I need to find any pavilion to sit with my family.


The president hosted this workshop, but he didn't participate. --**Correct sentence~ ^^ 


She made me an unforgettable memory at the amusement park. 

Better say: She gave me an unforgettable experience at the amusement park.


Don't worry a lot. I will work out. --**Correct sentence~ ^^ 


My team member haven't ever been participating in team-building activity.

Better say: My team members have never participated in a team-building activity.


I want to do something to develope my community. 

Better say: I want to do something to help my neighborhood.


He considers to bond between parents and children. --**Correct sentence~ ^^ 


That's a good cause to paly games. **Correct sentence, however, becareful with the spelling of "play"

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