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공개 첨삭 완료 2024. 04. 13 조회 4183

Making sentences with new words!

작성자: whoisthe1222 담당 튜터: Lynda
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Many elderly people have a hard time withdrawal from ATMs.
You never know why this computer is floating an error message.
I saw him with a cat the other day.
Actually, he gave money to university to enter there.
The sensor's activated, we need to be more careful.
You must not assume that he is a suspector.
The call got dropped third times.
I hope every single my team members gethers at my seat right away.
You'll need an order number if you want to pull up your order information.
I couldn't pull out money because there weren't any ATMs.
You can make a new fund account which have a minimum loss.
튜터 교정 답변

Many elderly people have a hard time withdrawal from ATMs.

Better say: Many elderly people have a hard time withdrawing from ATMs.


You never know why this computer is floating an error message. --**Correct sentence~ ^^ 


I saw him with a cat the other day. --*Correct sentence~ ^^ 


Actually, he gave money to university to enter there.

Better say: Actually, he paid to attend university.


The sensor's activated, we need to be more careful. --*Correct sentence~ ^^ 


You must not assume that he is a suspector.

Better say: You must not assume that he is a suspect. 


The call got dropped third times. 

Better say: The call was dropped three times.


I hope every single my team members gethers at my seat right away.

Better say: I hope that all of my team mates arrive at my seat right away.


You'll need an order number if you want to pull up your order information. --*Correct sentence~ ^^ 


I couldn't pull out money because there weren't any ATMs.--*Correct sentence~ ^^ 


You can make a new fund account which have a minimum loss.

Better say: You can create a new fund account with a minimal loss.

교정 내용이 클립보드에 복사되었습니다!