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공개 첨삭 완료 2024. 04. 13 조회 3893

The summer is comming already.

작성자: whoisthe1222 담당 튜터: Lynda
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These days, the weather was sunny, while it rained sometimes. I love sunny day, so my mood usually pretty good now. The spring is so short, and the weather is warmer and wamer. The cherry blossom bloomed a lot, I have been wanting to show you this scenery. I always take a walk at the park in front of my home every weekends, the landscape was beautiful and I thought of you. Last weekend, it was quite windy so petal of cherry blossom dropped a lot, it looked like petal rain. And it was also like snow. Someday, I will show you cherry blossom in my country through the YouTube!
튜터 교정 답변

Oh~~~ how I would love to see those time when the petals of cherry blossoms start to fall on the ground~~ ^^ such an amazing and lovely sight it will surely be~~~ ^^ Make a youtube channel now so I will be able to see those wonderful times~ ^^ Not to mention, a lot of people would also like to see the beauty of cherry blossoms and everything in your beautiful country~~~ ^^ 

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