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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 01. 24 조회 12489

My friend

작성자: 71302 담당 튜터: Mitch
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My friend is Susan.

She lives in my neighborhood.

She is my best friend, at the same time she is my favorite singer.

She has many hit songs.

She is famous and popular singer in Korea.

She is thirty years old.

She is a positive and out going person.

She is very goreous and cute, so I envy her sometimes.

She likes Yoga and Sports dance.

We usually go jogging at Bada park on the weekend.

We often go to a cafe and talk about our dreams.

It's so much fun to talk with her because she is humorous and good at telling jokes.

Her dream is to be rich. I hope her dream come true.
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My friend is Susan. She lives in my neighborhood. She is my best friend, at the same time she is my favorite singer. She has many hit songs. She is famous and popular singer in Korea. She is thirty years old. Incorrect: She is a positive and out going person. Correct: She is a positive and outgoing person. Incorrect: She is very goreous and cute, so I envy her sometimes. Correct: She is very gorgeous and cute, so I envy her sometimes. Incorrect: She likes Yoga and Sports dance. Correct: She likes yoga and dance sport. We usually go jogging at Bada park on the weekend. We often go to a cafe and talk about our dreams. It's so much fun to talk with her because she is humorous and good at telling jokes. Her dream is to be rich. I hope her dream come true.
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