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공개 첨삭 완료 2024. 05. 24 조회 3697

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작성자: whoisthe1222 담당 튜터: Lynda
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Second day, there was a big issue. We had a lunch late, so we just thought eating dinner simply. My friend bought a piece of cake that made in famous brand, 'HARBS', and we went to the convenience store for the next step. I bought noodles, both my friend and I bought a smoothie each. And then we came out from there, my friend's cake disappeared. kkk~ We're not sure, someone stole her cake! I thought a clerk was joking at first, but it was real. I guess someone knew it was good and stole it. She was so sad, but she overcame as eating a cake next day. kkkkk!
튜터 교정 답변

Oh my~ 

Maybe that person thought it's for free and looks yummy~ kkk~ 

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