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0603 holiday tradition

작성자: firb_lx0003_parkys 담당 튜터: Jace2usa
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while Christmas and new year holiday are universal globally but Korean Thanksgiving is a bit unique with mixed ones of the American Thanksgiving and Mexican day of the dead, when all family come back home and prepare for the special food for the deceased.there are 2 kinds of days in Asia and the one is Chinese new year and Thanksgiving day in Asia.
But there are pros and cons.The pros is that we could meet all family who we can not meet often and spend the holiday together and the cons is that the spcial food preparation could be the burden to someone who prepare for these event every ye
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while Christmas and new year holiday are universal globally but Korean Thanksgiving is a bit unique with mixed ones of the American Thanksgiving and Mexican day of the dead, when all family come back home and prepare for the special food for the deceased.there are 2 kinds of days in Asia and the one is Chinese new year and Thanksgiving day in Asia.
But there are pros and cons.The pros is that we could meet all family who we can not meet often and spend the holiday together and the cons is that the spcial food preparation could be the burden to someone who prepare for these event every ye The statement has several grammatical errors and lacks clarity in some parts. Here's a corrected version: While Christmas and New Year holidays are celebrated universally worldwide, Korean Thanksgiving is unique, blending elements of American Thanksgiving and the Mexican Day of the Dead. During this time, families gather together to prepare special foods for deceased ancestors. In Asia, there are two significant holidays: Chinese New Year and Thanksgiving. However, there are both pros and cons to these celebrations. The advantage is the opportunity to reunite with family members we don't often see and spend quality time together. On the other hand, the preparation of special foods can be burdensome for those responsible for organizing these events every year.
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