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작성자: whoisthe1222 담당 튜터: Angel1
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
As I said I like Ferrari, I support this team. But Lewis Hamilton was not in Ferrari this by this year. He's in Mercedes right now, but he's going to move to Ferrari from next year! It was big news for me, and everyone who like F1! Because he was a symbolic driver of Mercedes. So most of people and I supposed that he will leave this team since he retire. The reason that this news was big news for me is that he is my second favorite driver! From next year, both of two drivers that I love will participate F1 as a teammate. It's wonderful news! I'm almost dying wanting to see them..
튜터 교정 답변

As I said, I like Ferrari, and I support this team. But Lewis Hamilton was not at Ferrari this year. He's at Mercedes right now, but he is moving to move to Ferrari next year! It was big news for me and everyone who likes Formula 1! Because he was a symbolic driver of Mercedes. So most people and I are supposed to assume that he will leave this team when he retires. The reason that this news was big news for me is that he is my second favorite driver! From next year, both of the two drivers that I love will participate in F1 as teammates. It's wonderful news! I'm almost dying to see them.

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