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공개 첨삭 완료 2024. 06. 09 조회 3775

My life is going to be busy..

작성자: whoisthe1222 담당 튜터: Angel1
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학생 제출 원문
Recently I started study to get a diploma. I'd worked as soon as I've graduated high school. I didn't think I had to get a diploma at that time, I just wanted to work. But now, I'm preparing going to the Canada for working holiday, and I wish that I get a permanent residency. So I realized that I need a diploma to raise my points for it. I need to pass two tests and I have to watch lectures. And I also pass a driving test. It will be a hard time, but I'm trying to study hard. I can do it!
튜터 교정 답변

Recently, I started studying to get a diploma. I worked as soon as I graduated high school. I didn't think I had to get a diploma at that time; I just wanted to work. But now, I am preparing to go to Canada for a working holiday, and hope that I get permanent residency. So I realized that I needed a diploma to raise my points for it. I need to pass two tests, and I have to watch lectures. And I also passed a driving test. It will be hard, but I'm trying to study hard. I can do it!

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