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공개 첨삭 완료 2024. 08. 02 조회 3140

I think this is last essay about trip to Japan~~~

작성자: whoisthe1222 담당 튜터: Jin1
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
The last day, we went to the Universal Studio Japan~! My friends and I were so expecting it. Since whoever went to there said "It was wonderful!" But all of us was disappointed. There were less rides, and there were too many people. We had to wait for about 1 hour for lunch. They had leak seats for eating. The weather was hot, but they didn't have any place to avoid strong sunlight. It was challenging day.. However the parade and show were exciting, we just wanted to go out and go to the hotel. So we entered to there at 7 a.m, and we went out from there at 3:30 p.m.
튜터 교정 답변

On our last day in Japan, we went to Universal Studios! My friends and I were so excited, since whoever went to there said "It was wonderful!" However, all of us were disappointed. There were less rides, and the place was too crowded. We had to wait for about an hour to get our lunch. They had small seats for eating. The weather was hot, but they didn't have a place to escape the harsh sunlight. It was a challenging day. However, the parade and show were exciting. After that, we decided to go back to our hotel. So, we entered the Universal Studios at 7 a.m, and exited at 3:30 p.m.

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