태권도 show
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Hi all,
I have a story to share with you.
Last Friday, I went to the K-Art hall in the Olympic park to see THETAL with my family.
It was about 태권도(Tak kwon do) show. The show started at 7 PM and ended around 8:30.
Totally, it was great. The show was conbined with 3 parts
They are 태권도, B-boy and dancing. After that, my children liked it and felt good.
My children have learned for several years but now they are not good at 태권도 even though they are 3품 and 1품.
It was agreat family time and I also thank to a teacher of 태권도 academy who gave us tickets for the show.
I have a story to share with you.
Last Friday, I went to the K-Art hall in the Olympic park to see THETAL with my family.
It was about 태권도(Tak kwon do) show. The show started at 7 PM and ended around 8:30.
Totally, it was great. The show was conbined with 3 parts
They are 태권도, B-boy and dancing. After that, my children liked it and felt good.
My children have learned for several years but now they are not good at 태권도 even though they are 3품 and 1품.
It was agreat family time and I also thank to a teacher of 태권도 academy who gave us tickets for the show.
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