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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 07. 14 조회 13824

HI ~ beth

작성자: 1102013558 담당 튜터: Beth
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
hi beth~

thank you for the feedback

Ask for feedback on the document below.



Last Saturday and Sunday, I went to a family trip

We went with the mother in law

I often trip with mother in law

We went there to see the beach

I go to the beach twice a year in the summer and winter

The first good thing this good view on the sea

and I like take a walk on the beach

I love to see the sea


Nowadays, because of the summer beach korea has a lot of people

Many people is swimming on the sea and eat the sashimi.

Sashimi is eat live fish

Sashimi very dilicious

I love Sashmi
튜터 교정 답변

-> Hi Beth,

-> Thank you for the feedback.

-> I want to ask for feedback on the document below.

-> Last Saturday and Sunday, I went to a family trip. We went with the my mother-in-law.

-> I often go on a trip with my mother-in-law. We went there to see the beach.

-> I go to the beach twice a year, in the summer and winter

-> The first good thing I like this is the good view on of the sea and I like take a walk on the beach. I love to see the sea.

-> Nowadays, Because of the it's summer, beach korea has a there are lots of people at the beach.

-> Many people is are swimming on in the sea and eat the sashimi. Sashimi is eat live fresh fish. Sashimi very dilicious delicious. and I love Sashmi sashimi.

 

 

Hi David,

Thank you for sending another composition and for telling me about your trip to the beach. I hope your

mother-in-law had a great time, too.

I will call again tomorrow for our class, okay? laugh

 

-Beth-

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