15 hours working a week
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I disagree with 15 hours - working a week and one of these reasons is that it has never tried in other industrialized nations.
In some nations, 32 hours- working gets to be started for 4 days- working a day and 15 hours working is sort of only ideal one.
Another is that it is not enough to make the economy of the nation boomed for thr pursuit of the wealth.
Lastly I do not think only 15 hours- working is only way to make people feel that they control over their lives but 30 to 40 hours working a day could be still regarded to be effective and make people satisfied with the balanced li
In some nations, 32 hours- working gets to be started for 4 days- working a day and 15 hours working is sort of only ideal one.
Another is that it is not enough to make the economy of the nation boomed for thr pursuit of the wealth.
Lastly I do not think only 15 hours- working is only way to make people feel that they control over their lives but 30 to 40 hours working a day could be still regarded to be effective and make people satisfied with the balanced li
첨삭 대기
원어민 튜터 첨삭이 아직 등록되지 않았습니다.
교정 내용이 클립보드에 복사되었습니다!