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공개 첨삭 완료 2024. 12. 03 조회 2929

plastic straw

작성자: firb_lx0003_parkys 담당 튜터: Brandiss2usa
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I agree with the plastic straw ban because they damage the ecosystem seriously and even to me and my family.
If we saw the case of the turtle with the straw inside its nose, we could imagine how micro plastic endanger our lives and suffer from strange illness.

And we need to save wildlife and ourself,
so we need to act as much as we can, starting with the small activities like removing plastic straws and plastic cups and bags
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I agree with the plastic straw ban because they damage the ecosystem seriously and even to me and my family.
If we saw the case of the turtle with the straw inside its nose, we could imagine how micro plastic endangers our lives and suffer from strange illnesses.
 

We need to save wildlife and ourselves. We need to act as much as we can starting with the small activities like removing plastic straws and plastic cups and bags.

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