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공개 첨삭 완료 2024. 12. 05 조회 2903

Net neutrality

작성자: firb_lx0003_parkys 담당 튜터: Brandiss2usa
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I disagree with Net Neutrality because piracy is a real problem and cuts into the profits of corporations.
so in the big internet world we need to protect our companies and families.

without an authority in control people and children are at risk and naive from dangerous content that drive us into wrong decision like purchases, sexual assessment, addiction and suicide etc.

in AI era, some biased contents which has already been chosen by smart system might attack me and my family for their profit creation by the way of introduction and advertisement and educations.
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I disagree with Net Neutrality because piracy is a real problem and cuts into the profits of corporations. In the big internet world, we need to protect our companies and families.

Without an authority in control, people and children are at risk and naive to dangerous content that drive us into wrong decisions like purchases, sexual assessment, addiction and suicide etc.

In AI era, some biased content which has already been chosen by smart systems might attack me and my family for their profit creation by the way of introduction and advertisement and educations.

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