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The last one of this week.

작성자: whoisthe1222 담당 튜터: Jin1
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학생 제출 원문
We will protect our contry and our life. Fighting!!!!

Korean president crippled to all citizens through martial law.
If this situaion keep going on, Korean debt is increasing more and more, and finally IMF can break out agian.
The government have to offer a new incentives for citizen.
The Korean currency value dropped on the ground because of a president.
The tiredness of people accrued since 5 days ago.
All people who supported the traitor will be penalized inevitably.
We have to cut this vicious cycle this year.
튜터 교정 답변

We will protect our country and our lives. Fighting!!!!

Korean president crippled to all citizens through martial law.
If this situation continues, Korea's debt will keep increasing, and eventually, the IMF could break out agian.
The government has to offer new incentives to citizens.
The Korean currency's value has dropped to the ground because of the president.
The exhaustion of the people has been accumulating since 5 days ago.
All people who supported the traitor will be inevitably penalized.
We have to break this vicious cycle this year.

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