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공개 첨삭 완료 2024. 12. 10 조회 3024

Airport Security

작성자: firb_lx0003_parkys 담당 튜터: Brandiss2usa
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I agree with increased airport security because safety is more important than privacy and specially it is the only one important for airplane traveler. Once a tiny material of terrorist could make all disappeared in the air, which is a real horror and always make me prepared before getting on the planes. And terrorism is a real and ever present threat for our traveling and it should not be neglected at every moment.
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I agree with increased airport security. Safety is more important than privacy especially for airplane travel. Any possibility of a terrorist could create distruction in the air, which is a real horror, so it prepares me before getting on the planes. Terrorism is real and an ever present threat for our traveling and it should not be neglected at any moment.

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