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Self-Introduction

작성자: mangolang_yeonjoonpa 담당 튜터: TanhaP1usa
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I’m an IT engineer. Specially I develop telco system.
My team cooperates with people from India and Taiwan.
That’s why I need to improve my speaking skills.
I also play the keyboard in my band.
I want to be a jazz pianist someday.
I live in Gwang-myeong and work in Seoul.
It takes an hour to commute.
I spend quite much of my day for working and commuting.
I’m trying to minimize my lifestyle to make free time.
My favorite thing is journaling at my favorite cafe. It makes me calm.
I usually write about what I did this week and what I think recently.
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I’m an IT engineer. Specially I develop telco system.
My team cooperates with people from India and Taiwan.
That’s why I need to improve my speaking skills.
I also play the keyboard in my band.
I want to be a jazz pianist someday.
I live in Gwang-myeong and work in Seoul.
It takes an hour to commute.
I spend quite much of my day for working and commuting.
I’m trying to minimize my lifestyle to make free time.
My favorite thing is journaling at my favorite cafe. It makes me calm.
I usually write about what I did this week and what I think recently.

very good! 

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