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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 07. 15 조회 15211

Neighborhood

작성자: 1100835629 담당 튜터: Abby
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I moved in this neighborhood about 10 years ago.
At that time, I was married and had a baby only 1 year old.
My wife had to go back to work, so we needed to find children care center that was close to my wife's office.
So first of all, my wife found children care center and then looked up the apartment that we could live.
That's why I moved in this neighborhood.
While we are living in this apartment, I met good neighbor.
On the way from my home to children care center, we met each other.
Even, 2 families moved to other neighborhood,
but all 4 families still have a good relationship, and keep in touch with them.
Sometimes we meet to have dinner, watch a movie, or play a game.
I like this neighborhood because I have a good neighbor.
튜터 교정 답변

I moved in this neighborhood about 10 years ago. At that time, I was married and had a one-year old baby. My wife had to go back to work, so we needed to find a children care center that was close to my wife's office. So first of all, my wife found a children care center and an apartment that we could live in. That's why, I moved in this neighborhood. While we are living in this apartment, I met good neighbors. On the way from my home to children care center, we met each other. Even, the two families moved in to another area, we still have a good relationship and keep in touch with each other. Sometimes we meet to have dinner, watch a movie, or play a game. I like this neighborhood because they are good to us.

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Hi Jack,

I'm so happy that you have good neighbors!

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