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My business trip 2.

작성자: yanadoo-43_ih2007042 담당 튜터: HannahP2usa
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There, I looked around many buildings, such as various houses, memorial halls, museums, etc.

I remember that I normally got notified of the trip about 3 to 4 weeks ago.

And It’s also important who I go on a business trip with.
If I go with my co-worker, I will be excited all day.
But if I go with whom is not my company members such as other government office members, I will be uncomfortable all day. Because the government office is a higher-level organization than our company.
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Hi Juyeong,

This is a good continuation. You added details on your preferred activities and companions on your business trips. 

I have several minimal corrections for grammar: 

- "I remember that I normally get notified about the trip 3 to 4 weeks before the actual date."

- "But if I go with people other than my co-workers, such as other government office members, I will be uncomfortable. This is because the government is a higher-level organization than our company."

Hannah

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