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Last night work

작성자: yanadoo-35_18590166 담당 튜터: Anthony
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I'm working now. Even though I'm tired, I feel good. Because it's the last night time. Tomorrow, Im going to search information about retirement pension.
Nowadays. most people have thoroughly prepared for old age. So I'd like prepare my old life well. It's difficult about pension plan. But I have to study detailed system.
I have not prepared well so far. I think very stupid myself. However , I think that it's not late. So I will make new annuity account. And then I'm gonna distribute my salary well. I hope collect much money until retirement.
I want to live a planned life even now! ^^
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I'm working now. Even though I'm tired, I feel good because it's my last night at work. Tomorrow, I'm going to do some research and get information about retirement pension.
Nowadays, most people have thoroughly prepared for their retirement age. So, I'd like to prepare too. It's difficult learning about pension plan. But I have to study every detail.
I haven't prepared well about it. However, I think it's not late for me. So, I will create a new annuity account and then I'm gonna distribute my salary well. I hope to collect more money till my retirement.
I want to live a planned life now! ^^

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That's a good plan of yours James. Planning ahead for your retirement. I hope I could do the same too. My salary isn't enough to get a retirement plan. I just have to safe money on my own these days. Thank you for sharing and see again soon! 

Check some of my corrections I made on your letter.

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