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I watched an youtube video

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Hello!

I watched an youtube video titled: 'Can John Park enter the Berlin club?' (*John Park is a well-known singer in Korea.)
https://youtu.be/JaLKIll-huk?si=3DtWTm1d2mJRWcJr

Before I watch it, I didn't know that clubs in Berlin are knowned for thier high standards.
And the casts' trials to enter the club was so interesting and somewhat funny, too.

They searched online reviews, did some interviews on the spot, and even bought new outfits to get in.
The highlight was when John changed his outfit, because...his aura became completely different!!

And learned a new expression: 'shunned.' XD
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Hello!

I watched A youtube video titled: *"Can John Park enter the Berlin "*Club?' (*John Park is a well-known singer in Korea.)
https://youtu.be/JaLKIll-huk?si=3DtWTm1d2mJRWcJr

Before I watchED it, I didn't know that clubs in Berlin are knowN for thEIr high standards.
And the (casts' trials?) to enter the club was so interesting and somewhat funny, too.

They searched online reviews, did some interviews on the spot, and even bought new outfits to get in.
The highlight was when John changed his outfit,* because...his aura became completely different!!

And I* learned a new expression: "shunned." XD

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