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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 07. 18 조회 13235

Going to a cafe

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I usually visit café to talk with my friend. Sometimes, I go to café when I want to read a book outside my home. Although it’s loud at café, I can concentrate on reading a book without getting distracted. I think it is bearable if I put in my earphones and listen to music. Also if I try to concentrate on my work, I can’t hear the hustle and bustle of the people in the café. My favorite café is Gong Cha. It is a Taiwanese brand, because I love bubble tea. Gong Cha is a typical café brand of bubble tea. I don’t know how it is famous in other country but it is so popular in Korea. The bubble tea has pearls that are like round rice cakes. It is chewy. I like it. Some people don’t like it. It is just preference difference. I can choose the percentage of sugar and ice when I order in there. That’s why I can taste a variety of bubble tea tastes. The Gong Cha gives me a coupon when I have a cup of bubble tea. If I collect 10 coupons, I can change a cup of bubble tea.
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Hello Jake! Thank you for sharing your story about your favorite cafe. I hope that you will have a great weekend and a happy Friday. Here are your corrections. ^_^

 

I usually visit café to talk with my friend. Sometimes, I go to café when I want to read a book outside my house. Although it’s loud at café, I can concentrate on reading a book without getting distracted. I think it is bearable if I put in my earphones and listen to music. Also, if I try to concentrate on my work, I can’t hear the hustle and bustle of the people in the café. My favorite café is Gong Cha. It is a Taiwanese brand, because I love bubble tea. Gong Cha is a typical café brand of bubble tea. I don’t know if it is famous in other country, but it is so popular in Korea. The bubble tea has pearls that are like round rice cakes. It is chewy. I like it. Some people don’t like it. It is because we have different preferences. I can choose the percentage of sugar and ice when I order  there. That’s why I can taste a variety of bubble tea. The Gong Cha Cafe gives me a coupon when I have a cup of bubble tea. If I collect 10 coupons, I can exchange them for a cup of bubble tea.

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